I submitted a sample and one of the comments was to fix overall flow of the reading by inserting room tone or room noise to either increase the time or decrease the time between sentences
What were the other comments?
There was one recent poster who was producing audiobook-like material for English-as-a-second-language people. It was almost unlistenable if you do speak English because of—the long pauses—he left ----between words—and phrases. Is that what you did? I said there was a difference between reading slowly and deliberately and leaving holes you could drive a truck through.
If you submitted to ACX, their current process is to make you announce the whole book—wrong—and only then review it and describe the damage.
When I did it, they allowed me to submit a paragraph or short segment for Quality Control. That’s when I found out about my tongue ticks, lip smacks and epiglottal noises. So then the choice was to get in there with the Audacity tools and fix everything over years (cringe), or learn to record my voice without tongue ticks, lip smacks, and epiglottal noises.
We call that learning to be a voice actor. There’s a third choice. I did not give up the day job.
It’s still a choice for you. If your damage is going to take centuries to fix, it might be good to polish your style and read it again.
There is another First Time Reader observation. You start the book a rank amateur and finish it a seasoned professional. You listen to the first few chapters and really, really want to read them again.
Audiobooks are supposed to sound like natural, pleasant speech with no distractions. They said so. If your natural speaking style is nothing like that, creating an audiobook can be a retirement project.
There are exceptions. I have almost all of Sarah Vowell’s audiobooks. She does not have a natural speaking style, but she’s an entertainer and terrific writer and you quickly get used to the work.
https://www.kozco.com/tech/audacity/clips/Pro/SaraVowellAssassinationList.mp3
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